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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 13, 2006 21:30:18 GMT -5
I wrote this one a while ago, when I was feeling new agey.  Running Through The Dawn's Mist. A Beastly Animation. Whispers From The Wind. Speaks An Ancient Incantation. My Sisters A Flight. Howling Wild Cries. Through The Forest Growth. Off With Our Disguise. Melding With The Dark. Eyes Of The Moon. Speaking With The Breeze. The Signature Tune. Their Mind's Clasp. Is Completely Untrue. Fooled By The Cunning Arrow. Our Teaching Deja Vou. The Cloud Settles Low. Amongst The Trees And Grass. The Signal For Us All. To Begin OUR Midnight Mass.
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Sharon
~Snow Flake~
When Was The Last Time You Danced Like No One Was Watching?
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Post by Sharon on Apr 14, 2006 19:54:30 GMT -5
I liked that, very abstract-like in a sense but great use of imagery. Not that big of a fan of the capitalization of each word but that's just my opinion. Thanks for sharing.  |
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 14, 2006 21:19:36 GMT -5
Yeah lol I'm obssesed with capitilization.  |
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Echo
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Post by Echo on Apr 16, 2006 13:15:46 GMT -5
Lol.^ Its a very nice poem Im just getting into writing poems...Kinda hard though.
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 16, 2006 14:39:42 GMT -5
I think writing songs is harder.
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Echo
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Post by Echo on Apr 16, 2006 18:43:54 GMT -5
I guess you just have to have the touch for some things... I listen to alot of rap and I have had the same favorite rapper for years so I guess Ive learned some things.
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 16, 2006 19:25:05 GMT -5
Yes, and I think it is what you start out writing, you started out writing rap so it came easier in the beginning and that's what your used to, me I started out writing poetry.
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Echo
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Post by Echo on Apr 16, 2006 19:50:00 GMT -5
True...im trying to do both tho..Because Writing Poetry helps with writing songs...And songs helps with writing poetry. So it works out 4 both.
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 16, 2006 19:50:46 GMT -5
That would be good! Post whatever you write, I want to hear it.
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Echo
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Post by Echo on Apr 16, 2006 19:54:59 GMT -5
Ill try to get something on here soon.
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 16, 2006 20:17:21 GMT -5
Good. I wanna hear em!
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Elvos
New Dreamer
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Post by Elvos on Apr 16, 2006 22:08:29 GMT -5
This is a very cool poem. I really loved the metaphors, such as "Eyes of the Moon." Such metaphors are great for getting your own, personal creative image of the words. For example, reading the poem gave me an image of a bright, starry night sky, with a slight wind blowing. I see a group of people, running through a forest under a bright moon, the wind blowing their hair and clothes, all of them getting ready for some celebration. And I LOVE that image, so I love the words you used, because using these metaphors and not a lot of detail can give each of us our own mental picture. So yeah, I love this poem Great job! |
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Post by BloodMaple on Apr 17, 2006 17:59:33 GMT -5
Thanks a lot elvos! That's my ambition, to put the images in their head about how I saw it, and you saw it the same!
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Echo
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Post by Echo on Apr 17, 2006 18:58:28 GMT -5
Elvos you are really smart lol...
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Zafooo!
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Post by Bluedude on Apr 18, 2006 11:19:32 GMT -5
'Paint a picture with words....' and you certainly did! Excellent job, I really like how it flows. It sounds like it could be a Loreena Mckennit song.
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